Music: Seventeen-Ladytron
Art: Red Core-Bean Finneran

This was so hard to do with the word limit!

Ow ow! I like it! even with the limit, you did a great job.

One nitpick is in the fifth line. I think that “your” should be “you’re” because it could also be “you are”.

Regardless, awesome story. Thoroughly enjoyed. :)

Very nicely written – you managed to summarise the key points of the characters relationship succinctly but impactfully…

And what an ending! Bravo – MH :)

Fantasic.

Nothing to say about the plot or the emotion at all.

A couple of nitpicks, ‘devious eyes’ is probably something you should show, not tell. ‘Casted’ is wrong tense, ‘he cast’ is probably better. Kihd is right about the ’you’re’.

Nothing that stops this from being a great piece though.

Very powerful! I didn’t find any typo beyond the ones mentioned above. The story conveys the emotions very well, congratulations!

Very fun and naughty. Got a nice intensity to it like a spicy dish.

Oh this is excellent. Sultry and sassy, but dangerous; lethal. She is a femme fatale to the T of the description. Brilliant.

Oh, I really like it!