While generally upbeat, this also comes across with a bit of a sad tone due to it being entirely in past tense, PJ. It’s got a did-but-doesn’t-anymore flavour.
I do hope it still does all that stuff P.J. But I like the slightly sad tone. After all, our writing would be nothing without the emotion that fuels it. Great use of ellipses make it seem to be stretching on forever. Good job as always. Abby x
boxofun
August Rode
Akheloios
Abby (LoA)
JC Tovil
THX 0477
Tad Winslow
Kevin Lawver
Jae