Short and sweet. The popsicle line was just the right shade of non-sequitur to grab my attention.

heh, you could start all kinds of stories with ‘the popsicle melted as the spaceship was landing’. okay, maybe not a LOT, but at least a couple..

A bit too short for my liking, and the abruptness didn’t work well with how careful the previous bit was.

Not bad, fun, but you could have done more.

Thank you for your comments. I think this was a good attempt for my first sequel!