awesome description! could use some spaces between paragraphs if you have the characters.

It was an ordeal, but as soon as I brought myself to read past your lack of clear paragraphing that can only be resolved by double carriage returns (hint, hint), I actually really enjoyed this. I really felt for the narrator and I loved your choice of more exotic words. Bravo!

Really like it! ….I believe it is “Indulge” not “endulge”. But really good!

many thnks for the feedback! I’ve been experimenting with dialogue and emotions a bit. To see if I could get the tone right.

@ kat – fixed it – problem of not being a native speaker (is that a valid excuse w the existence of spelling check?) ;)