I read both the prequel and this. You took the story to such a…I don’t know, just a cool place. Haha, What I’m trying to say is that you took a little and made a lot. Such great writing and such a cool idea!

I like where you took this story. I wrote the first one so it would be intentionally vague, so I had no idea what would come next. At first I thought they were talking about drugs, and I like that it was keys. It’s a really awesome idea.

I think I liked it a lot more as a scifi. Great dialogue.

High drama. I thought the dialogue was well written— it comes off the page authentic to how people speak. Maybe this would work better as two ficlys because I’d like to read something in between the long stretch of back and forth dialogue— a description or two. Very sweet, and real sentiments regarding love. They called each other out on that topic and both delivered genuine answers in their own way, true to their character. That’s not always easy to pull off, so good work.

I like the tumble of half-sentences refering to things outside the knowledge of the reader, it sucks you in.