Very nice use of poetic narrative, especially in the standard paragraph form.
Also enjoyably absurd.

Why thank you! It really was quite fun to write.

I agree with memento. My only suggestion – it would benefit from a more liberal application of white space.

Shiny use of internal rhymes and Alice humour.

Trying to get the rhythym took a while and stopped the flow of the reading, but a great ficly nonetheless.

I didn’t find the rhythm difficult at all— it was jam packed to the brim with greatness— the thicker you can pull rhymes off (in a clear fashion) the better. I thought this read perfectly. I think it lends itself to spoken word more so than anything— that might be why some are finding it rough to read. You must sit them down with closed eyes and force feed. hehe

Thank you so much! Yes, I do admit – reading it aloud is easier. I couldn’t put it into the traditional poetic format without losing extra characters…

right, so no white spaces, but a great tale of the origin of Sir Pants. :)

THERE. Found a way.

oooooo :)

That was quite funny. I liked it as a lyrical way to come about someone being named Sir Pants.

Thank you.

Did anyone else notice that the acronym for the title is OCCD?

Maybe I’m just a little too OCD myself…

:) I was wondering if anyone would pick that up…