“It’s more scared of you than you are of it!” It’s definately the case here, although whenever people say that to me I scream back “Clearly not! I’m the one shrieking on top of a table!”
I feel like the end could do with a bit more definition. It feels like it trails off, like it needs something more concrete to finish it.Also, in the second stanza the narrative becomes more personal, whereas by the fourth paragraph it has clearly reverted to a much more clinical viewpoint. This short peek into Belle’s mind before quickly reverting to type is a major-throwoff.
However, the detail is perfect. We are given the character of the k’bar in just the right way: in the terms in which a person about to be eaten would think of – remembering all the facts about eating. As well as this, the actual story is sound, given just the right amount of suspense before the turnabout.
I wonder, is she in a zoo cage or is this some bigger kind of execution.
Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))