I was going to say that the repetition of ‘the’ to start sentences was a bit jarring, but I reread a few times, and realised it suits the staccato nature of the piece, with each sentence it’s own important scene.

Lovely prose poem. ‘the sun smothers the moon’ is great.

Aww, thanks so much =] Mechanical stars is my favorite to work on. I love creepy things.