The last paragraph is great, so much to unpack in it. It’s got all the progress in society that has improved the way of life for people that love each other but at the same time making it harder to be a violent reactionary.

Interesting setup. Definitely needs some prequels and sequels to fill out the gaps. :)

I liked the twist that Paul seems meek at first (clenching the arm, the yelp), but in the end he’s the one who springs into action. I didn’t quite get what you meant by ‘internalize his guilt’, but that’s a minor point.

I know we all have our memes and pet subjects, but it seems like everything I’ve read of yours is about gay men being gay or being treated some way because of their gayness. Maybe branch out a bit.

Interesting setup. Definitely needs some prequels and sequels to fill out the gaps. :)

I thought it was great. Until recently I’ve been writing mostly vignettes that make no clear sense without prior context.

This fits the criteria, and I think stories like that tap into the reader’s unconscious.

It is just a slice of a reality that the reader is allowed, and the reader needs to extrapolate a substance of story from what limited information is presented.

I thought the irony of Paul’s roles in this story was brilliant. Great ficly! If that fashion design thing doesn’t pan out…

THX – perhaps he is referring to keeping it in his head instead of aggressively acting out. It could also refer to the more oft true than not fact that those who violently oppose homosexuals are latent homosexuals.