I don’t like the ending, it sounds like I’m setting up a pun or something, but I’ve been trying to re-work it and I can’t fix it.

This is a combination of the beginning of books unwritten challenge (which I’m too late to enter anyway) and the challenge to do something involving revolution.

I wanted to make you wonder about what this man was trying to rise up and overthrow, and what powers he enlisted in order to it.

It does feel like a pun, but the piece made me want to know more anyway.

Maybe it would seem more sincere as the first page of a book, since you’re in the beginnings of books challenge.