Wow, last line is awesome. It really took my breath away. The details feel so real, the entire thing is a thumbs up. If you have any characters left, trying tossing in some paragraph breaks. They can do wonders for any story. :)
I’d probably add a paragraph but that’s already been mentioned. I felt like there were a few too many repetitious phrases, mainly ‘through those eyes’, but that could just be me. :)