Good work.

You built the momentum slowly and the pace was good too.
Some grammar issues, but hey, who doesn’t have grammar issues?
I think you meant “…I always see him as someone…” in second paragraph, second sentence.
If you have room, double paragraph breaks look better, I think.

Thank you, it needs some work it was just an idea I had and I had to get it down somewhere, after all ideas are very elusive creatures indeed.