The question is which girl was happier. I would go with the one in the red dress.

You need to capitalize “lisa” in the 5th paragraph. Also need commas at the end of the dialogue (like “That was fun,” the girl said).

This started out sounding really interesting, but the ending seemed a bit forced. Make it more interesting! Add details! And yes, the commas go inside the quotation marks.
All in all, a good start and a really sweet story!

Thanks for the comments. Just getting used to ficly but enjoying it so far.