Changed to a 3rd perspective, from her sister’s point of view.

Nice addition, really making the situation about as bad as possible. Thanks for adding on to the fun…er tragedy and drama, I mean.

wow, what a perfect twist! Nosy little siblings have the best timing, too.

Ooh, a definite twist! A few spelling errors in the first paragraph, might want to go through it again, but overall I love this. I love what you guys have done with the story! I feel bad for her sister… someone is not going to be happy with her!

I was thinking that just such a twist was needed to bring about a reason for the uneasiness of the situation. Well done, ’lil Krully.

The switch in the POV would be difficult to resolve if it wasn’t for your commentary. Maybe you could add a “little sister said” clause to make it clear without the commentary?
‘I grap her wrist…’? Funny, sounds like a little sister but I think you meant “grab”. []o)