Well, I definitely wound up lost. It’s semi-poetic, which is nice, and all the imagery is very powerful. For my tastes though, I think you over-did it. Too many metaphors muddled your message. That may be a matter of opinion, and I do see what you were going for.

Also, why are Quaking, Eye, and Flood capitalized? Did I miss something there.

THX, i think the capped words may have been a bit unnecessary. I’ve adjusted that, but use the many metaphors to reinforce the title of the piece. Thanks for the comments!