I like it. A couple of things: “keep hold” rather than “keep a hold” and one cannot ‘reel back in surprise’ when one is in freefall. Then again, perhaps this makes sense in the unreality of the delusion.

I found the sentence “It was quite useless however.” to break the flow of the paragraph. It sort of just sits there, lacking the narrative flow of the sentences around it.

The very last word, “instantly,” seems extraneous, unnecessary and redundant. I don’t know how hitting the ground instantly is different than hitting the ground.

Heh, thank you for reading the story and pointing out the errors I made. They should be fixed now. :)

This is alot like how I feel when I’m wasted lmao! This story has always been a favorite of mine and I dig your take on the descent.

..I love how you capitalized Time. It makes it really stand out as something important, a higher being we can’t describe. Haha, I always enjoy your writing.