Wow. Another of your pieces that has completely blown me away. This is beautifully tragic, confusing and full of supressed pain. Great structure and repetition and language and just everything!! Second to last paragraph was my absolute favourite.

To me…this is true poetry.
Abby x

Oh wow thanks stars in my eyes 8_8 big tears of joy <3

Free verse is usually of little interest to me and I rarely read it. However, I read this piece and I must say, PJ, I think it’s quite good. There’s only one thing that I can’t make sense of, and that’s the period that ends the third line of each stanza. It seems to make a non-grammatical sentence of the first three lines. Would you explain?

Explain… It just felt right. Wishy-washy though that answer is… Maybe I’ll look at it in the morning and think it wrong but it’s still fresh at this point.
But I’m glad I made something you usually don’t like into something to please you August.

oh the throes of depression and apathy, woe, woe is me! Very well done, without being too dark because the ultimate wish is simple happiness. 5 pencils

hell yeah i agree with what is being said about this entry. nice contrast and emotion throughout PJ. i really find it hard to NOT enjoy your poetry.

i’m not a very good critic
i can only put things i dislike into words
that being said, i have nothing to say

Th-thank you :)