This leaves questions in a good way I think. Who’s talking? What’s the project for? And what are M&M salts?

On a much more sinister note, when I went to basic I knew a Capt. Song, so this was a little weird for me. Good stuff though

I was really hoping this was going to be about chocolate, but anyhow- tone is flawless, really like the suspense at the end!

Interesting discussion. I like that it sort of hints at the scene I want to see, Capt Song’s discussion with the other soldier. Nicely done for lots of suspense.

The story is the focus of what makes this excellent. Sometimes I get so wrapped up in the sound and wordplay of language that I forget the importance of story, and that it should take precedence. The dialogue is the most impressive, actually. It sounds natural and succeeds in divulging certain information pertinent to the story. Nothing stagnates. It flows well. Congrats on the feature!