(spelling. 2nd sentence needs to be reworked.)

Oh my, the last line is magnificent. It’s so fantastic, the rest of the story only seems like a vehicle to deliver that one amazing line.

Fixed? The last line was actually written last but seemed to make a lot of sense as I wrote it but I was worried that there wasn’t enough context to imply what I wanted to imply.

I can appreciate that you wrote it last, I guess I’m trying to pay you a compliment, your last line is great, it seems the rest is fill. That line, and only that one, defines your character. I can read the entire Ficly and not gain one thing about Moris, an image doesn’t appear, physical or psychological, until the last line. For me, it’s profound and a rare gift.