You use repetition well, but also manage to use a rich variety of words. That combination works well in a poem. It’s the opposite of being bogged down. It reads easily, however, it’s hard to duplicate.

As for the content of the poem, it’s decidedly melancholy, and it rings true even if it’s fiction. I believe it for what it is— it’s not fantastical— it’s like a slice of emotion.

am i the only one who remembers

Honestly, no. I feel like a scolded elementary school student who just had an F stamped on his quiz. So, now you have to tell me. Pleeeaaase

jesi

I remembered, but I didn’t have time to note you. :( I truly mourned her in my heart, and yes it has been 3 years that feel like decades.

When h

When he comes back, won’t she be more alive?

I don’t often rate poetry because it is so subjective, but since you are featured and this is a tribute to a sadness I share, I’m rating you 5 tears out of 5 instead of pencils.

I remember. I hadn’t been here long. It’s how I knew Ficly was special.

Thank you for this.

I missed knowing her. It almost doesn’t feel right commenting on this it’s so personal. but reading this hurts, and I had to say something, ’cause this is special, and I wish I could give you a hug.

such a perfect memorial.