Gorgeous descriptions. Utterly gorgeous. You transported me there. I could nearly smell it.

Then, of course, you snagged me right back out of it again.

Great stuff.

I had a feeling that was where this was going. Enjoyed it all the more before of it. :)

Perrrrrrrrfect! You did this beautifully! The imagery was fresh and almost so real you could touch it.

Welcome back btw. :)

Beautiful! Very well written, and with a nice twist at the end! Congrats!

Beautiful. And I love this: “…a dull grey sky, pregnant with more.”

This is so wonderfully descriptive…

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Very nice, although I spoiled it for myself by reading ethel’s first comment, and then the last line. My eyes have an unfortunate habit with that.

Anyway all very good descriptions, although I’d be wary of straying in purple prose with so many adjectives and descriptors. It kind of lost me a few times on my first reading because of the sheer amount of information presented in a similar way. Good atmosphere though.

As soon as I convince myself another beautiful line can’t possibly be had you manage to surpass my assumptions and bludgeon my doubts to a pulchritudinous pulp!

That was amazing. I absolutely love this story!! Fantastic job.

Your desciptions are fantastic. It’s interesting that the protagonist is a faceless “she”. It feels like that makes her dreams/fantasies greater than her reality, a reality that is arguably more fantastic. A case could be made for Nature vs technology too I think.

Nicely told. I liked the meaning at the end of the big paragraph that is only fully evident after you read the last paragraph. Nice imagery and comment on human nature and a need for cycles.

Very nice descriptions! When I first read it, the verb tense and sheer volume of description made me get a bit lost, but after reread, an awesome picture formed in my head. Thanks. :)

I could picture myself right there and then…I love reading things that transport me to the moment of the story

I love your writing style. I was so wrapped up in the scenery that the ending took me by surprise!

Homesick. Just the sight of something familiar can help so much. And also just the need to keep track of time. Day to day time is one thing but what of the years the months of the season. what an excellent way to keep people sane as they hurtle through space.

Very evocative. It’s rare that a story can transport the reader fully into another world, let alone two worlds. Loved it.

It’s no secret that I love great descriptive pieces, and your imagery was so defined that we could all build an image of it in our minds. This was very well done, and your work is a credit to you.

Well crafted atmosphere!

Having spent most of my life around forests, I can imagine the stress a long period of time confined to a metal dwelling would engender.

I didn’t see the twist at the end coming. I was expecting fantasy, not sci-fi! You paint a perfect picture. Like H.S. Wift, I absolutely adore lusciously descriptive pieces such as this one. It’s so much easier to read when your imagination only has to do half the work.

And I liked how you crafted the character. Her humanity was appealing to me.
Good job, and many thanks for entering the challenge.

Nice twist. did not expect it either!

This is a fantastic piece! It gives me another perspective on life in space (something I’ve been thinking about a lot lately).

Wonderful. Congratulations on the win!