Powerful and heartbreaking.

Interesting concept with a lot of potential, although I found the transition from the dream world to the physical world to be a little abrupt and jarring. I wonder if there is a way to make it more smoothly in the space of a single Ficly? You may want to develop it and spread it over a couple of sequels.

The coma topic is always an interesting one, and it’s portrayed nicely here. There’s a bit of confusion relating the dream world to the real world, and it didn’t catch for me until the sixth paragraph. Otherwise, awesome!

Some nice elements, especially the mystery around how she wound up a criminal for helping lots of people—makes one wonder if it’s a corrupt system or the individual is misguided somehow.

I could have done without the dreamworld/coma thing, just cause it’s been done a lot. Some of the sentence structure is a bit choppy in the early bit, some of the fragments standing out, especially where they could be attached to a nearby sentence with a comma or dash.

I was thinking of the underground railroad, but then the coma made me consider the medical abilities a the time and I decided not. If it were the underground railroad, then it must be some come dream!
Word repetition of dared and breath (which should be breathe).. pet peeve! I don’t like to repeat words in my head in the same paragraph or sentence. :) Just a note.

Thank you all for your feedback! I will have a think and take on board what you have all said :D