I like the concept here, each mythological river to its own suffering. It’s a neat idea, and I like that you really brought it to full fruition in this piece.
However, I fear that I must take issue with your repeated use of the triple-full-stop punctuation to denote pauses.
It’s a common thing among writers (veteran or not), and should be avoided whenever possible. Most of the time a simple full stop will suffice, or other methods employed for expressing importance (such as shorter sentences, or the rule of three).
I see what you mean. My initial thoughts when I did it was to have the reader think about their own personal or inner look at each river individually. How they would percieve it if they were the ones at the rivers. I appreciate the feedback though sir and I will try to ease up on the full stop’s.
It’s called an ellipsis. I abuse the shit out of them. According to their Wikipedia page (which states proper usage) I’ve been doing it wrong quite a bit.
In any case, this ficlet is fantastic. I like the concept, and I can visualize the universe within the story. In their own way, the rivers are beautiful. (A river of endless fire beside a river so wide you’d never see the end? Imagine looking out at that from beyond the flame, on the shore.)
I love mythology. Your story gave me nostalgia. :-)
HSAR 
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