I like the tone and feel. It made me think of waking up, as unpleasant as that can be, especially with an Eastern facing window in the bedroom. Seems like it could have really benefited from some paragraph breaks, both for readability and even to add some emphasis and dramatic effect.
I like the tone and feel. It made me think of waking up, as unpleasant as that can be, especially with an Eastern facing window in the bedroom.
Seems like it could have really benefited from some paragraph breaks, both for readability and even to add some emphasis and dramatic effect.
I like the delusional feel of this story. The setting could well be a mental institution or the fella’s home. Either way it works for me! Nice job. HELLFIRE DAMNATION!
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