Cool scenario, very dirty and full of intrigue. Great set up for a thriller or action-suspense sort of thing. Not sure why you’re hyphens after dialogue. Language thing? The norm for written English is more like below.

“Come, let me buy you a drink,” he said in a calm, soothing voice…

I like hyphens after dialog -it’s the newest thing. -All the kids are doing it. Okay, maybe I’m a little hyphen happy -but hey – they’re great! This story’s great too.

i’m not sure if I want to continue this, and how.. i don’t have plans. If I think of something i’ll write it, but nevertheless I’d love it if someone else continued it :)