I like the story behind this… if that makes sense… I only have one little… thing… in the first line when she writes “well my name is…” I just feel that the well throws the flow a little bit. But maybe thats just me =)

BTW, welcome to Ficly! Did you just get here or have I just missed you?

hmm yeah maybe the “well” can be taken out.
and well I didn’t even know this existed until yesterday.