Very heartbreaking end to this relationship.

Woah, talk about raw energy. This is captivating at times. Remember the momentum/inspiration these strong feelings give your art and keep pulling from real life experiences and your work will always shine as this does. Must… Resist…. Writing… Sequel…

Please write a sequel Tad, I would love to see where you take it!

Awesome description of the pain of heartache. From the posture, to the silent sobs, to the dam and the ripping bandages metaphors, this piece is beautiful.

This is uncanny- a very real mirror of my life and experience this past year- I have never read something that described an experience I have had so perfectly spot on- the emotions it evoked are still quite real and raw-
well done capturing the real emotional experience to a relatable subject- I miss my friend very very much

Truly heartbreaking. I know this feeling too well. Some words you repeat a little too close in succession; lips, friend. And the second sentence is a little confusing: “First the extra…”
But honestly it doesn’t detract from what’s happening hear. The hurt is real, and you express it well. I’m just a grammar freak. I do a degree in this and it taints your perception a little…

One of the many stories I read on here that I struggle to read as fiction instead of reality – it feels too real!

I agree with inky’s comment and would add that, in the first sentence of the last paragraph, I’d say either “the shaking subsides enough for me to crawl…” or simply “the shaking subsides and I crawl…” to make the line more fluid.

Very emotional piece. I love the line “The convulsions rip the bandages on my heart”.