I think you captured the character’s spirit well.

Great job! I love this prequel, you really got inside her head. :)

Thanks!

" some things are cliche because they happen the same way everytime" that is what i learned from this story thanks.

you’re welcome!

This was a very “real” telling. I like it. The only hangup I had, was the character’s name. (And, I am the last person who should point out anything about character names.) I just had trouble making myself not say, “Kayla.” Nothing wrong with this piece overall, just letting you know my thoughts. ;)

(Just to add.. I do love knowing her thoughts. Sometimes I would rather know what the character is “thinking” than saying.)

@ Jenunique I agree with what you said about her name. I just wrote this piece as a prequel to a story I read.