I liked it a lot. A strange setting, with good pace. Nicely done.

what a great mind you have, to think of a plot like this. I suppose that is why we write though, because each of us has something different to say from a different perspective.

it was good writing, too.

kinda freaky.. then i guess he;ll be buried or burned alive,which is scary, but he probably won’t feel it.
was that morbid? yeah, sorry.

Wonderfully written, and made me laugh. I love things that make me laugh.

woe muffy you just went all out with thiis i like to see other mentally unstable people out here, welcome to the fringe.lol
“muffy thinks to himself, iwish they would just….”

hahah.
Muffy?! I like it.
I would also like to see a bunch of Prequels, maybe describing the things that Sean did that he was confessing to…..
just a suggestion.

A nicely simple beyond-death piece. Nothing too complicated, no greasy backstory. Simple human reaction to an inhuman situation. But a few notes:

I might move the blink sentence up to the “staring” line, since it’s connected. I’d also consider taking out the ‘hell’, since the early hell steals some of the late hell’s thunder.

“upon thousand” → “upon thousands”.

I might take “was passing on” and put in “wasn’t passing”. ‘Cause technically, it’s not.

“George’s conscience” → “George’s consciousness”.

“…how humorous it would be” feels awkward for the established PoV. Might be better to save the three characters and use “…how funny it would be”.

With the tone more of George’s annoyance at Sean going on and on, the closer might punch better as “…wondering when Sean would run out of sins.”

But certainly a good work – skips a lot of needless background and marches to the part most any reader can connect with. And a credit to the young ones of my hometown stomping ground.