First thoughts: I was lost on who was saying what, can I have the video version? ;) (rereading) ……… I have now read it 3 times, I think I get it: the revenge for killing the daughter was not sweet, it was pointless and left the killer feeling dull.
this is not one of my best works. In fact, it’s terrible. I’ll be honest, I don’t remember writing it, but it IS an exercise I do when i want to get into the mind of a villain. This is more like a WIP than anything else. SO THX’s observations are bang-on on two things: 1) It’s not a happy piece of work and 2) I may have been intoxicated … hahaha..
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