gross-tastic! nice capture of the oldest profession. I imagine the first time has felt this creepy for many. Console or not!

we must have entered at the same tyime this is really good though
they have this book called the consumer you should read it this is straight out of his mind

Sex and Cyberpunk do seem to go together terribly well.

I like the girl’s resignation, and how you’ve spiced it with the underlying hint of fear.

Classy. Sometimes, not leaving your console is all the reason you need!

Oooh. Nasty. You capture the protagonist’s inner conflict very well here. It makes my skin crawl just reading it.

The first two paragraphs hooked me, and the story concept is intriguing. I’d love to read a sequel from you.

Really good description and execution. The third paragraph felt a little clunky to me—I think it was the repetition of describing her reaction to the thing without revealing what it was—normally an effective device, but it seemed to carry on just a bit too long. Other than that, good job.

Really good. I think you have a real contrast with calling it “Sexy Console” when she finds it sooo unappealing…

I was disgusted by this story… which is a testament to how well it was written. Nice work! You set a very chilling tone…

Very gross. Very Cyberpunk. Good Job!

Much love for the approach you took. Left me with questions… Who are ‘they’ and why is she repaying them? Possible plot hooks. I’d love to see more!

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