wow you just came up with this? you are a gem. 6pencils

I would love to put that on the back of my book………… but.. thats only if I could actually write anything besides poems or song lol

Very nice, it’s interesting and engaging enough. I want to be nitpicky, as you’ve requested but I can’t seem to point out anything other than the double “the’s” in the first paragraph.

And I love how it’s from the perspective of Death. Lovely.

D’oh! Thanks for the catch, Platypus.

Careful, Stovo –
I expect this is going to be a long book. He has been around for a while.

If I have nitpick, I think it’s that he seems too jovial. Maybe it’s just me, but I always thought he’d be a bit mean.

Should have expected such sillines. Very different sort of character voice for the usually somber Death, but I think it works within this sort of tongue-in-cheek reality you’ve created (the publisher, the reviewing publication, etc.).

I like how not-so serious Death is.
Makes him seem less creepy.