Basically, this is an unplanned brain-dump.

I need to write, and to practice.

Don’t worry, I’ll get better…

Intriguing. If you do any sequels, I’m curious to see where this could lead.

Heh, if this is just practice, I’m really looking forward to what’s coming when you “get better”.

Thank you for the kind words! I’ve got to keep in mind that I am my own worst critic. (And good lord, I’m a cruel one.)

i started looking around half way through wondering if they could hear me lol

Sexy
Scary
Scrumptious

Ah, the undefined “they.” A favorite of conspiracy theorists and science fiction enthusiasts everywhere! Well done.

i could hear modem sounds, you know the dial up screech, during the data scrolling across the screen! lol. it just has a great corrupt feel.. the message with the elusive collective ‘they’ warning is haunting. good job.

You can’t fool me, Computer Virus! Neural nets are just mathematical structures!

Me likey.

I never really like the self-aware stories answering an unsaid response (i.e. “No, not in the…”), but aside from that personal quibble, I enjoy the idea and like the look of the piece.

Kudos.

I tend to agree, Mister Dillard. That’s why I considered this somewhat … amateur.

But it was fun nonetheless.

It would be interesting if agents used more percentage of their mind in order to fight through the neural net, but risked detection because they weren’t contributing the standard 90% that is expected.

Ooo… Spiffy idea!

I don’t think that the fact that you only use 10% of your mind is an urban legend should stop anyone from using it in their stories. I dig it!

I know it’s a fictitious rumor, but it’s a fictitious story so I felt justified. :-)

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I like it. It could have a little more computer-ish garbage dump text though; it looks sort of padded to 1024 characters as is.

Funny thing… It was a lot more computer-ish garbage dump.

But ficly auto-formatted it.

hehe…

Must have…MOAR!