It’s like a session of psychotherapy extrapolated into an allegory of creation. Don’t think I’ve seen that done before, so good job, especially considering the length limit you kept it within!

Oh my freakin god
this just like ingenius
i mean it is just brilliant if i was judging this would win twice.

LOL! i love the way you used the lines! Creative, unique, fabulous, and charming! I’d give you a gajillion pencils. :)

Great job! Hope you like the sequel!

Thanks, everyone! I had a lot of fun writing this one.

This is wonderful. I don’t think I can say anything that hasn’t already been said.. And will I echo MJY. (I even had to make sure this wasn’t in my “LiMoM” challenge before I commented. ;) )

Great piece!

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SOPHIA IS MAKING A NON-GENERIC COMMENT NOW!!!

When I read this I thought at first I might have voluntary mental bulimia, but then I reconsidered and found that I’d rather show my approval through transmogrification and subsequent grovelling….

::turns into a worm:: ::wiggles uselessly at your feet in submission and worship::

Very nice!! So clever.

This is just brilliant.

This is just brilliant.

WOW. Thanks for the brain ache.

This is where I’m hoping you’re getting the image of my jaw hitting the desk.

Crazy interesting idea and great execution. The only thing that struck me was the suddenness of the end. I attribute it to the character limit. It’s a nice enough way to end it, but the sentence itself was a little abrupt—but again, the limit. Still a fiver.

Wow. Welcome to ficley. Now we can read lots more of your work

My original ending was along the lines of:

The boy considered this, angrily destroyed his work, then heaved a sigh of Relief.

awesome.

i like the longer ending.LOL.

nice piece.

-tas_13

Very original and well executed.

Fantastic, and indeed, very clever. More, please!

ya this was brilliantly written. Glad you made the FEATURE!
It would seem this challenge is bringing out the good in people’s writings

well smack my ass and call me stanly kowalski, you are a rising star. where did you come from? one day and you are the featured author, wow you rock.
Don’t pay any attention to what the moor whispered in ceasers ear its bullshit anyway. congrats on the feature and the awesome story.

FEATURED??! Holy jalopies!

Thanks everyone!

Wow, great job! This is really well executed and creative.

Humans really are mostly harmless.

This is insanely creative. I feel threatened. I will now beat my chest and rub myself on Ficly to mark my territory.

Wow. That was actually a bit disturbing. Good work!

awesome :)
really liked it. even though I didn’t know what the challenge was. This was in response to a challenge, right?
Oh, I don’t know, but it was amazing, so good job :D

Huh. Very nice.

I suppose I can’t say anything that’s already been said here, so… I’ll just depart and say and that your work was quite unique and well written. Good work.

i like this better than “dont read me”….

i am a rebel!!!

Oh no! Sophia, be careful, the Wrath Of The Ones On High might come down upon you for such blasphemy!

Nice work. A well-earned feature.

So how you coping with you’re new found fame? can i suggest joining the league of awesome?

I would be honored. How does one join?

Really like it. Very creative.. I can’t help but wonder if Insanity would come after Hatred… (although that’s less of an emotion I guess). But it’s thought-provoking, and I love that in a story!