very tender tale, their youth shines out like daisies.

very tender tale, their youth shines out like daisies.

lesbians? oh well, guess you can’t stop true love..

I think this piece of youthful intimacy is quite lovely…beautiful even. And the extra-copulatory dialogue and thought-patterns is pretty “real” also.

That said, and I hope it is only a typo, but I’m a stickler for correct grammar unless it is intentionally part of the story. The last line of the second paragraph, I kissed the top of her head played with the ends of her dark red hair, I think should have the word “and” after the word “head”.

Yeah, I know, I’m picky…but I still liked it a lot.

God, how I miss those beautiful days. I remember the beginning of relationships past, how in love we were.

Makes the breakup all the more painful.

Beautifully written, Sophia. I couldn’t have put it in better words.

Wow thanks to all and very much so to scratch’n’scrawl, there should be an “and” i totally meant to put one there… wonder if it’ll fit…

ok, I took out some punctuation in order to fit the “and” :P so it’s still incorrect, but I find the “and” more important than the commas… maybe that’s just me

That really felt honest. Almost familiar. Loved it!

i love it

squeaks thanks ^.