Hope nobody’s offended by my use of the term “Chinaman”. Just trying to keep the language as period as possible.

That ColtCo gas-driven pistol won’t help you against THAT, Bill. Although some might say using a steam walker against a man with a pistol makes Jack a bit of a coward!

hey you cant help what your chracters say any more than we can

hey rob you have a sequel

Bluefish – I always felt he should have been called “The Coward” Jack McCall.

Joe – Sweet!

I love it. This is the sort of thing I always hope to find on Ficly: original, creative stories in under 1024 characters.

Glad to be of service!

(Wait – have I rated my own story yet? No?)

well i totally got a western feel from this, so good job! and burger is right, we should be writing more like this!

Like it, like it a lot. Kind of intrigued by steampunk myself, might have to have a go at some point.

I wouldn’t normally nitpick, but just because I really dig this story (see the five pencils), I feel I should point out that “it’s usage” and “it’s helm” should both be “its.”

Remember: “Oh, if it’s meant to be possessive, then it’s just ‘i-t-s,’ but if it’s meant to be a contraction, then it’s ‘i-t-apostrophe-s’… scallawag.”

“it’s” means “it is.”
“its” means “belonging to it.”

I don’t have a problem with that! I’m a grammar nazi too, from time to time. Good catch, and thanks for the great comments, everybody! I’m going to have to “sequelize” this myself, I think.

STEAMPUNK FTW!!

Congratulations on getting featured. It couldn’t have happened to a cooler story!

Ah nuts. I totally missed it!