WOW! I had to read that outloud to get it right. Hizpanic cheriff neeedz to take care of beezness at home, I tink.

Thanks for sequeling!

why I only get a three pencil review?
I introduced a new character, with an accent? Oh i see you werte scared to gimme four because people will talk huh? (wink wink)

I love the way you write your accents

thanks muffy

lol, maybe it was hard to read? dunno. But I like the way you wrote the accent, and I’m glad a hero has arisen!

mebee only tres pencils cuz I have an issue wit them illegals……..mybad

these are legalz because the sherrif runs barstow so he must be a citizen

Crazy accent may have been over the top. Definite points for flat-out unexpected plot direction. I mean, if you thought our jails were overcrowded now, imagine how bad they’d be if people got locked up for being a pooh see.

I am a bit confused about who is saying what – the lack of ‘said…’ tags confuzzles me. Also, why did the deputies run? The sheriff didn’t seem angry of intimidating.

Like the ‘eyeballed the police’ phrase and the first line in general. Like the subtle (or not) mocking of Juan’s masculinity. And the accent is fun.

oh i am sorry April i was trying to make the sheriff intimidating but it was hard since he talked like ricki ricardo
sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn’t.