oooo…i’m hooked. any chance of a sequel?

wow! i’m thinking murder and then, haha, gluttony.. just an awesome twist!

wow! what a twist!

AHAHA I LOVE IT!!!

You freakin’ rock!

I was completely taken by surprise by the end.

MOAR!

Sickety sick sick :)
More more more please!

Woah! That was like…. the awesome-est twist ever!

I was also tricked at the end! That was awesome!

Add me to the list of those tricked. Clever, clever!

I tricked myself, to be honest. I started with the first few lines and then started wondering whether it would end up being wrath or envy, and gluttony came out of nowhere to take it.

I’m not quite sure I get the title. The end made me laugh, though.

@Silven: Indeed, I had trouble coming up with a title I liked, so I settled for a generic one (given the challenge) that wouldn’t give the end away. I’ll give it some more thought and see if I can come up with a better one.

The way the beginning is written perfectly conveys the guilt and need for haste. Her reaction isn’t quite equal to his panic, which makes him seem more of an unstable character. Splendid.