Aw. Format wise and getting all technical it might have room for improvement.

However, I loved it. It was so sad but you told her story and managed to make me feel bad for her in such a short space. And then I got happy at the end!

awww! =D
This is really deep!

Lady Ray, that was an inspirational poem, which I loved. Very well written, great imagery, some grammatical errors but a amazing piece. Thanks for sharing