Love the concept. Leaves the reader confused, but entirely by design (rather than, as is often the case, through bad writing); a lot of impact is gained from brevity here.

For consideration – I suspect that the delivery might be made to seem more hectic and panicked if you went with a more machine-gun delivery through shorter sentences of more uniform length, perhaps by just chopping some sentences in two?

I’ll try, but actually right now Ficly won’t let me do anything with this. It keeps redirecting me and won’t post the rest of it =/

I now have 360 somments.
So THERE

somments?
good job, Muffy! =P

or is that like code for Story-comments…? bc then I’d feel like an idiot!

lmao.
I can’t believe I ruined such an amazing event with a typo!
NOOOO.
lol

lmaoo really though, you’re good! I mean a typo on your 360th comment = amazing! =P

I know what you mean. I was getting redirected all night so I had to stop.

Curses on Ficly! I want to know what he finds. And congrats, Muffy. I didn’t even notice the typo!

I’ll try to add the rest in a new post.

Yeah, finish it when you can. I am curious!

omg yay! I finished it!