Oh this is awesome. It is so film noir I was waiting for the narrator to ask me if i could spare a smoke. You might get some flack because of the runons but i think they added to the feel of the story. This was really top drawer cyberpunk.
P.S. get a pic

I didn’t notice the run-ons. That’s how good an author I am. I thought this was great stuff, an excellent very cinematic beginning.

I love this, and when are you going to enter one in this challenge Doitforscience?
This was just an awesome story, very true to the genre. It was Very dark.

Great story! It reminded me, just a little, of the I, Robot movie. The remote-controlled bird was an interesting plot point. What is the chip for? I need more! :-) Well written.

So happy guys! Never really written this genre before, so thanks for your comments and ratings… :)

i thought this was very dark – descriptive, and let us hang with some dark foreshadowing… so well done.

I, Robot meets The Hitchhiker’s Guide to the Galaxy. Great combination, got to love it.

robotic bird theives.. clever indeed.

“The poisonous heartbeat of a lifeless city.”

That line was erotic to me… Anyone else?

No?

There must be something wrong with me.

I love this.

Whoa, odd coincidence. I think Asimov’s short story about a robot bird being the savior of US Robotics after anti-robot backlash on Earth was part of I, Robot, or maybe it was part of Robot Dreams

I’m waiting for the sequel. Didn’t think I would get into cyberpunk. Thanks guys.

I’ve sequelled! I’m not sure where it’s all going but I’m happy anyhoo – if anybody wants to collaborate then feel free… MH

Lovely and intriguing. Quite the universe/reality you’ve hinted at here. I’m not sure I followed everything, but that’s sci-fi for you.

This one is interesting! I’m stuck to comment on how I feel about this one and that’s not a bad thing!