Comments on The Hamsville Murder by Eloquent Mess {(LoA)}

Eloquent Mess {(LoA)}

Continued…
- Posted over 10 years ago.
Raegan Dauterive

ahh! I positively love that you used the word “skivvies”! lol and McGreedy is an interesting name, Jim is the name of my best best friend ever, and that makes me happy =D

Plus you can never go wrong with a mystery O_o
- Posted over 10 years ago.
- 5 out of 5
Twyst

Feels a little stiff.
- Posted over 10 years ago.
- 3 out of 5
ElshaHawk (LoA)

hmm, this detective has issues finding things, and his morning routine is so routine and structured, that I think he’s slipping..
- Posted over 10 years ago.
Eloquent Mess {(LoA)}

It does feel stiff. Maybe I can break free in future ficlets.
- Posted over 10 years ago.
Eloquent Mess {(LoA)}

Not continued. Re-written. I apologise, everyone, I just didn’t feel very into this story…
- Posted over 10 years ago.
ElshaHawk (LoA)

i KNEW that was the twist from the first one! cha-ching! high five! go me!
- Posted over 10 years ago.
Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

hehehehe look they are your kids if you dont like em just dump off on the side of the ficly superhighway.
- Posted over 10 years ago.
Eloquent Mess {(LoA)}

That’s kind of what I did… I’m so ashamed.
- Posted over 10 years ago.
April Raines

I don’t think it needs sequels, EM. It stands completely on its own. There’s enough there that you can make assumptions about what happened. ’Course, we all know what happens with assumptions. ;)
- Posted over 10 years ago.
- 4 out of 5
Eloquent Mess {(LoA)}

They make an ass out of U and Mptions.
- Posted over 10 years ago.
Eloquent Mess {(LoA)}

They make an ass out of U and Mptions.
- Posted over 10 years ago.