change “to sit when he was told to sit” to “sat when he was told to sit” and it’ll work better

Can 35 be considered monosyllabic?

Thirty has two syllables on its own, and thirty-five counts as three.

Maybe… 10.

Fun fact: you can die from a 9mph blow to the skull. Getting hit by a car going 10mph could, potentially, be fatal.

And 10 has one syllable.

I’m being too technical. I’m sorry.

you are just being you Mess. hehehe

Stud, Mess is right in his first comment but it still works well. Mess ….where did you go after the first comment….your hand was there and kept writing….. buttt.lol

ugh dogs
i love dogs
i love cats more
but i love dogs

What, nobody called you on the use of ‘enough’. Clearly two syllables there. Nice job on the poem overall though, a kind of metered, thoughtful pace to it that fit mournfully sitting on the porch thinking about a dead dog. And I’m not even a pet person.

eloquent mess that makes no sense. sit works a lot better than sat……. unless he’s changed it since then and i didn’t know about it. oh yea, funny poem by the way.

I can’t put my finger on it, but this seemed a bit strained. As if you weren’t comfortable with the challenge. It just seemed like a hodge-podge of thoughts trying to be broken down to simple words. Sorry, but not your best work.

ohh…

dog and car go boom. dog fall down. car run over dog. Dog go flat. Dog not get chance to learn, no run in front of car.

Dog very flat.

We get puppy?