I like this. Granted, sequels or prequels would have to take some departure from this narrative style, but I don’t think that affects the quality of the writing.
My only feedback would be to restrain from using the actual word ‘oil’, preferably until the last sentence, definitely not twice in the last paragraph – for effect more than anything.
Blimey! (I’m trying to refrain from using words like “Frecking”) That’s pretty good Tom! It’s like something has been ripped out of Pink Floyd’s DSoTM and posted on your Ficley page! Good job!