Ooh, very nice job on being in the moment and telling a whole lot of story at the same time. Very pitiable character you’ve created, but kind of scary too. Could have been an entry in the song lyrics challenge, I think.
I don’t know…the challenge never came to mind when I wrote it, and I only remembered it existed until just before I published. In my opinion, the lyrics aren’t what’s important in this ficlet. And yes prequels and sequels would be great, I have some ideas but I’d like to see what others come up with.
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