The story’s good, but the story’s tag had me rolling on the floor. 5 pencils for the funny tag.

Hey, I takes-em where I can gets-em. Thanks!

corporate metaphor? :)
I like the mother’s warning at the end.

Ah, the life of a jelly bean? Good job being really macabre and horrid at the beginning to set up the ending to be as jarring as possible.

Hahaha this was brilliant.
I just adored the idea and the twist at the end. Definatly five pencils.

Hmmmm – you get five pencils from me for sure, I loved the story.

But now for the next year or so every bowl of jelly babies is going to freak me out!

mmm jelly babies

Great job! I loved the twist. Thanks for entering.

Wow, attention! sticks tongue out

Thanks for the positive comments, everybody!

This is excellant! It definitely deserves the win!

wow really cool. :)

So sad, I felt bad for laughing.

:-)
I never saw the ending coming.

Very well done, and I don’t mean in a steak and baked potato kind of way.