Such a small, yet eery scene.
It makes you wonder why the little girl is all alone, and what exactly is happening around her.

not adolescent, no, preschooler. :) a couple of wordy places “passing over the floor in which she was grounded to” do you need ‘in which’? and “heard the rings of pitter-patters which provoked her to jolt forward then back as she tried to” :heard pitter patters ring out making her jolt forward and back??
I hate the word resided, just my pet peeve.
A thrilling nightmare in any case, full of questions and cold foggy mystery. :)

Very intense and exciting, and I think Elsha beat me to the editing nit-picking (which I agree with). ‘Pointed ears’ made for an interesting hint at character and even a bit on setting.

i will change some things thank you :)

I liked this one :) you have alot of descriptive words, you should split it into seperate paragraghs if you have any characters left. :)

thank you:)