A nice climax. With the idea of the challenge in mind, I think there may be a little too much exposition, with the lines about the parents, but it doesn’t ruin it.

Definite thumbs up for slurpees with the time watch at the end, gives it a nice little zinger.

time machines are overrated and overused. this piece definitely could have done without one.

I rather like time travel, so I didn’t find it overrated or anything of the sort. The similie at the beginning about his voice ringing like a bell was a perfect touch.

People say time machines (like money) are overrated and overused only when you don’t have one.

This challenge has a tendency to limit good storytelling for that final moment of emotional release, and you did a superb job of creating the tension without have a story to back it up.

Great story! I think it’s awesome that he and his villain were in the chase back on the Titanic.

Time machines are overused BECAUSE THEY’RE AWESOME. Granted, sometimes people misuse them, and then they suck, but sometimes they can be great fun!

Hey Stus I reckon you have a winner. Well thought out and nice little climax.

hmm, yeah if you left out the ‘box was safe, my parents’ blah blah, you get more action and less exposition. I don’t think the actors say it was all over until after it really is all over.

Wow, quite the discussion. I thought it was a fun little read and the whole time watch thing reminded me of one of my favorite shows growing up, ‘Voyagers!’.

I like it, but exposition did feel a bit out of place for the challenge.

OMG! Cupcake, Can I write a sequel?

of course!