the last sentence feels a bit flat. very good sci-fi talk otherwise.

I agree with pyro about the last sentence falling flat. I liked the details about p45’s name, and your choice of curse words.

I agree with pyro about the last sentence falling flat. I liked the details about p45’s name, and your choice of curse words.

Yeah, that last sentence isn’t sitting so well with me right now. S’what I get for writing at 2am. Let me re-write it.

What is the significance of the name “P45”?

The P45 is the British equivalent of a pink slip.