Second Chancers - Stefnir's Vigil

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The soft snowflakes came to rest in Stefnir’s beard, littering its brown hues with white splotches, making him appear older than he actually was. The cold penetrated his furs in some places, but it was of no consequence. His was a land of both beauty and bitterness. It was a land of untamed fire and ice. The cold was a companion and a friend.

Stefnir’s gaze was fixed on the horizon; on the distant glow he saw at the edge of the world. He had watched as the dark morning peace had been interrupted by a sudden blue glow somewhere over the sea, eastward. Doubtless some new trickery by The Exiles. March’s raids had escalated the violence and surely Erik would be hot with anger and planning his revenge.

But could it be them? The Exiles hunted and fought with the same weapons as did Stefnir’s people. They warmed with fire and took women to bear their children.

No, he decided, this light is unnatural.

Perhaps the Gods were descending upon them all, with all the strength of Valhalla’s honored dead.

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  1. Avatar John Perkins

    Nice use of imagery here. Paints a wonderful scene, and leaves the reader intrigued as to what that glow might be.

    Should it be “this light is unnatural,” putting it in the present tense. Though the story is told in past tense, shouldn’t his thoughts be present tense? I’m not sure as I think it reads fine both ways.

  2. Avatar Browncoatben

    Good point, John. Updated…

  3. Avatar kaellinn18

    Damn, this was awesome! Great imagery, and I believe this is the first story about vikings I’ve seen here.

    Also, I can’t believe I haven’t followed you yet. This has been rectified.

  4. Avatar Browncoatben

    Thanks Kaellinn…very kind words.

  5. Avatar Mostly Harmless

    Oh wow, kaellinn’s rights this is the first of it’s kind as far as I know… And executed beautifully!

    From imagery to plot potential, you’ve set up yourself or another brave writer with a cracking bit of storytelling – good work! MH :)

  6. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Lovely, evocative, and contemplative beginning to what sounds like a brutal war epic. Really liked the tone and setting here.

  7. Avatar JLaughter001

    Love these, BCB. Bring me moar.

  8. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    nice set up, with great imagery and details in his thoughts.

  9. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    This was nominated for the ficly book.

  10. Avatar Browncoatben

    Jimeny…I’m on a roll! Thanks Elsha!